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illustrated by DragonSpark/courtesy of DeviantArt




"The Drowning Pool"







Senseless words that gravitate

The 14caret masturbator

Left you like a reprobate

With all around to witness

Seamless flawless left in darkness

Once a scholar now is lost

Fleeting floating on a ship

A ship of fools that heaves behooves us

Funny now who is the fool?

There is no one to rescue you

You’ll drown for sure

The drowning pool

Is way too deep to see the bottom

Flip flop flopping

Like a fish out of water

Gasping for air was Poseidon’s Daughter

But woe was the aftermath

Atlantis slaughtered

T’was no vessel to escape in

And in the distant foggy future

There rose a prophet who came to tutor

But alas no students would bow to suitor

The lessons had been lost

Yet in the artifacts that would be found

Witnessed by many from all around

The trumpets rose without a sound

No lamp would light their way

The fossils that remained within

Would last for ages wearing thin

But now the find once where begins

Once where begins I ask you?





©2010 H.A.Irwin,Jr.
 


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Cherry rose
02/15/2011 19:20

Wow your pen powerful amazing write Hank

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Mea. (Elaine)
02/15/2011 20:57

If this is an incling to what I've got to look forward to in your writes...I am filled with anticipation.

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Hank Irwin
02/15/2011 21:12

Thank you Cherry and Mea...very much. I will try not to disappoint you guyz! :)

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Shane
02/20/2011 10:51

'Atlantis slaughtered' is a great line.

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Hank
02/20/2011 16:04

Haha! Shane, thanks for coming by bra. Glad you liked it brother.

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Jason Hill
02/22/2011 11:24

The trumpets rose without a sound , no lamp would light their way... nice write , Hank... kinda has that " Rhyme of the ancient mariner " feel, although it happens to most of us some time in our life, seems we need to where our life jackets, or make sure we always have " someone " for our rescue...

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Hank
02/24/2011 11:12

hmmm, i like the parallel you draw from this Jason. thank you kindly my brother. it's real nice when people look into what you write.

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02/24/2011 13:46

Realised that I hadn't left a comment here, Hank. Think I sent you one via Facebook instead. Love the rythme of this and the imagery being a fishy type :)

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Mea-twosocks
02/25/2011 20:36

Hey, I have been waiting very patiently to see more of your writings. lol. Just want you to know I am checking in.

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Hank
02/26/2011 18:37

You did Fiona, but thank you again. Glad you liked it too. Fishy you say? Hmmm, now that I think about it, you'd make a heckuva mermaid m'lady ;)
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Haha Ms Mea, will do my dear :)

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03/03/2011 22:15

Many things make people think artists are weird and the weirdest may be this: artists' only job is to explore emotions, and yet they choose to focus on the ones that feel bad. It's strange.

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Hank
03/04/2011 14:33

Well Supra, art just like beauty, is in the eye of the beholder. A true artist will lend to the originators of "their" art. Emotion is part of creation. We should express ourselves, albeit, in a way that people will comprehend. Thanks for coming by uh, girl uh, guy? Help me out here a little ok? haha Do I know you by a different name somewhere?

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Mea-twosocks
03/30/2011 18:56

Still checking.......

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Hank
03/31/2011 06:57

Haha Mea, I can't believe I have this many views, but only sparsely on the commenting. Oh well, doesn't matter to me. I enjoy even a single comment. <3

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Meatwosocks
04/08/2011 02:18

You know Hank, I am not here to get noticed- not selling or promoting anything. However, I always comment on my friends works and must admit I do wonder sometimes why I don't get even a nod at times. Just bad form I feel. But I let it all slide. As for you--I have this sight in my favorites and I'm keeping my eye on you, ha ha!

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Hank
04/20/2011 15:44

Awe thank you girl. You're a great friend to have. I mean that. And I too, feel the same way about things on the internet. But it does make one wonder at times. I got my eye on you too hun. Been busy busy crazy crazy lately. I'll get back up to speed soon though. xxx's!

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